Friday, November 16, 2018

An Encounter - EXCERPT!!! --- Comments mandatory**

**Okay, maybe not quite mandatory, but much appreciated...

Here is your excerpt! Let me know what you think pretty please! 😊

Cyrus was proud of himself. He’d managed to find her with hardly any problems. Okay, so maybe he got lucky and happened to glance out his window at just the right time and see her walking into the science building. But the fact that she didn’t notice him following after her, at a stealthy run, was pretty skillful he thought. 

And there she was, messy locks held up by a hair tie that was surely not up for the task, curls escaping to brush against her skin. Head tilted just so as she read something interesting. How would she react if he gave that hair tie one little tug and let all of her hair fall down? She had one leg curled up, propping her book, the smooth line of her leg catching his eye 

But he wasn’t dwelling or anything. Just reveling in the fact that she hadn’t noticed him even still. Not at all mesmerized by the sight she presented. 

What was he doing again? 

 

Cassie brushed a hair from her eyes, slightly frustrated that it wasn’t staying up, when she heard a sound by the door. Freezing, she slowly looked up, and saw Cyrus Foster standing by the door, a gleam in his eyes. 

Straightening up, she turned to face him. “What are you doing here?” 

He jumped. Had he not been paying attention? He was looking straight at her. Boys, she thought to herself. 

When he still didn’t answer, she prompted him. “Well?” 

“Nothing,” he finally replied, tucking his hands into his pockets and strolling casually into the room, eyes wandering everywhere but her. 

Cassie watched him warily, feeling her confusion slowly turn to frustration as he stood by the window to her left, just feet away from her, in complete silence. 

“Is there a reason you followed me here?”  

Hm? Oh, sorry, I forgot you were here,” Cyrus said casually. 

Cassie snorted. “I’m not an idiot, Foster. 

“Obviously.” 

Cassie started to ask him what the hell he was doing here when Cyrus turned around and squatted next to her, putting a finger up to quiet her mid-question. 

Feeling her hair begin to crackle, she swiped his hand away and backed away from him, rising to her knees angrily. “I’m not one of your admirers, Foster, you can’t just invade my personal space and think I’ll swoon. So I would appreciate it if you backed the fuck off.” 

Cyrus raised an eyebrow cheekily, and stood up. 

Her search for solitude and peace thoroughly ruined, Cassie grabbed the cushion and took it back to where she found it. Brushing past Cyrus, she bent over and grabbed her book. But when she turned around to leave, she stopped short. Cyrus had closed in on her while her back was to him. And he wasn’t stopping. 

Cassie’s feet carried her away from him, until she hit the wall. There was nowhere for her to go, and Cyrus knew it.

 
 

Friday, November 9, 2018

Add, Rewrite & Repeat

One thing about writing something that you hope** to be a cohesive work is that you have to continually go back to the beginning.

Now that I've fleshed out some characters who were previously rather flat, and eliminated another altogether, I need to go back to the beginning of my story and start adding and rewriting scenes.

Unfortunately, I didn't just start writing this book knowing everything about my little world. Any author who tells you they did, well, they're definitely bragging and possibly lying. As I've progressed, I've altered some facts and added new ones, changed motivations, tweaked personalities, and so on. So this will be just one of MANY cycles in the editing process.

But the beautiful thing about Felicity and Joey? I get to write some more awesome scenes for them instead of just referring to them every now and then. 😊

I'm actually kind of excited about where this could head. It might change the line of the entire book, or maybe it'll just change a couple of scenes... But let's not get ahead of ourselves...

And hey - who knows? Maybe it means another potential couple. 😉

Stay tuned! I'm hoping to post another excerpt!! (Comment on the type of scene you'd like to see (and I may just oblige)! (steamy, funny, certain interactions, the 'knocking out' of a specific # on the list, etc.))

-AU
**(and by hope, I mean pray, agonize, and obsess over)

Monday, November 5, 2018

Updated Characters

With my newfound knowledge of characters, I actually ended up combining two and fleshing out my secondary folks a little more. They actually resemble real people now, instead of cardboard cutouts.

With that in mind, this is my new character lineup. I've also provided a small "caption" to describe in my words who they are. :)

We still have our main people:
1. Raven (the overriding heroine of the story): think "artist with a demon"
2. Cassie: "overlooked brains"
3. Paige: "damaged do-gooder"
4. Mike: "good guy - bad luck"
5. Cyrus: "ladies man with a secret"
6. Ryder: "voice of reason"

Secondary Characters:
1. Felicity (combo of Phoebe and Felicity): "beauty and brains - but..?"
2. Joey (he has a personality now!): "overlooked 'heir'"

AND FINALLY:

3. Zoe - (the bridge between the girls and the guys) - this is my last remaining character to flesh out... and let me tell you, I'm having a hard time with this one.

Since I cannot seem to puzzle her out, I'm stuck between "eliminate" and "really really feel like she's vital." I honestly feel like I need her, but I don't really know what her motivations are... I can't see her history or her story.

I know she's a bit of a tomboy...she bonded with the group of guys when they were younger. And though she now has great friends in the gals, I feel like there's something missing. Is she hiding a secret? Does she too feel like something is missing??

The question, of course, is what?? Is she hiding that secret, or is it something else? I feel like it's almost too obvious, and a sort of easy out to just make her LGBTQ. I can kind of see it, but I don't know for sure. It does and also doesn't feel right for her.

Let me shout to the rooftops: "Zee Mackenzie - who the heck are you?!?"

Well, if you have advice, let me know! Until then, I'm going to continue to try and get in touch with Zee and see if she'll tell me herself. ;)